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The Sin Ledger of Hollowfoot Pass
Chapter 5
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Panel 2

Far-side inspection post at lower altitude, warmer light but still cold noir palette. Yan arrives after crossing Hollowfoot Pass, murder-token fading in his chest.

Panel 3

Yan approaches Master Dou's open inspection tent. The formal reading setup is visible inside.

Panel 4

Yan steps into the formal reading space and confirms the delivery.

Panel 5

Yan offloads the murder-token onto the table.

Panel 6

Master Dou breaks the seal and begins reading the token's contents.

Panel 7

Dou reads the token. Yan waits in silence while the memory unfolds inside Dou.

Panel 8

The token reading reaches the crucial added act. Dou's reaction is almost invisible, but Yan notices.

Panel 9

Dou finishes reading and looks at Yan with a new, assessing attention.

Panel 10

Dou reveals Lady Wei's true history as a former guild courier.

Panel 11

Dou explains that Lady Wei built a loyalty evaluation for Yan specifically.

Panel 12

Dou lists the traits that made Yan worth testing.

Panel 13

Yan understands that Lady Wei's death was part of the expected result.

Panel 14

Dou states the pass condition plainly and bureaucratically.

Panel 15

Dou confirms Yan passed. The emotional weight of 'was' hangs over Lady Wei's absence.

Panel 16

Dou opens the iron ledger-case and removes Yan Qiu's unsigned documents.

Panel 17

Dou identifies the papers as Qiu's indenture documents and explains why they remain unstamped.

Panel 18

Dou explains Yan's promotion and the automatic release of Qiu's domestic obligation.

Panel 19

Yan accepts the papers and places Qiu's freedom against his chest.

Panel 20

Yan thanks Dou, but Dou immediately orders him to sit, shifting the scene into a new contract beat.

Panel 21

Dou places the second sin-token on the table. It is visibly heavier and a deeper red than any token Yan has carried.

Panel 22

Yan studies the second token and realizes the normal recipient field is blank.

Panel 23

Yan reads Yan Qiu's name in the notation field and understands she is the named subject of the contract.

Panel 24

Yan asks what the token means. Dou defines the narrow space between offer and coercion.

Panel 25

Yan looks between Qiu's release papers against his chest and the new red token, then picks it up.

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