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The Save Point Has Wheels
Chapter 4
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The food truck rolls down a dirt road through grey, overcast countryside. Dust rises behind it. The sky is heavy and threatening.

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Erine pulls into a small village. The well is cordoned off with torn cloth. People cluster weakly in the square.

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Erine ladles soup into wooden bowls. Helena watches from inside the truck. The villagers eat desperately.

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The village square is empty. Clean bowls sit stacked on the serving counter. Erine's fuel gauge ticks up visibly.

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The truck hits the road again. Night falls. Erine drives through darkness, headlights cutting through.

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Dawn breaks over a long column of refugees on the road. Wagons broken down, people slumped against carts. A mother holds an infant.

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Erine works the serving window relentlessly. Helena helps from inside, passing bowls. The line never ends.

Panel 9

The refugee column has moved on. Erine sits alone in the truck cab, staring at the fuel gauge.

Panel 10

The truck travels to a roadside checkpoint. A prison transport sits abandoned — guards gone, prisoners weak.

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Erine breaks the lock with tools from her subspace pantry. She passes food through the bars to the prisoners.

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Late night. Erine in the truck's tiny kitchen, washing bowls. Helena watches from the doorway.

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Erine finishes washing. She stands at the sink, head bowed. A single tear falls into the basin.

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Helena approaches quietly. She stands beside Erine, not touching, just present.

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Erine wipes her face. She tries to answer but the words catch.

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Erine's voice breaks. She admits the truth.

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Helena speaks. Her voice is quiet, but certain.

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The scene shifts. A dark room. A candlelight. A hand seals a letter with black wax.

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Close on the letter. The handwriting is elegant. The contents are damning.

Panel 20

A messenger on horseback rides through darkness. The letter is secured in a satchel.

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Back to the truck. Erine and Helena in the cab. Night. The fuel gauge glows.

Panel 22

Erine speaks. Her voice is flat. The corporate-deadpan is back.

Panel 23

Helena asks the question. Her voice is steady.

Panel 24

Helena sees through the lie. She doesn't call it out. She just waits.

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The truck pulls back onto the road. Dawn breaks. The horizon is dark and uncertain.

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